... rhymes sound forced and very childish. The whole swirl swoosh and twirl bit also sounds childish. If you would make it sound more "...
4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 22/12/2007
thoughts, like birds caught in the oil spillage.
12 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 25/07/2009
Loved it! With an engaging theme and rhythm, it brilliantly combines everyday speech and poetic skills. The image of the teacup is exactly right. Worth several readings: joy!
2 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 22/02/2012
I never knew hot chocolate could be so beautiful... I really love the poem... Now I wish I had a campfire, someone playing a guitar, and a lot of hot cocoa...
3 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 25/07/2008