wow... i want to know what happens, definitely got my attention.... it does need a little proofreading for grammatical mistakes, but it sounds good to me. let me know how it goes :)
6 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 21/06/2008
It's definitely intriguing. I personally don't love the whole "fair maiden from the palace" background...but that's just me. I know plenty of teens who enjoy that besides. It's pretty indepth with detail...not all of that is really necessary in my...
11 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 21/08/2009
Not bad, but I feel the dialogue was a little cliche. You're trying to make a serious moment with the later part, but it feels thrown off somehow... I guess I can't explain it too well, but it just feels a little over...
3 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 20/06/2008
I see you and think that you are such a beautiful pearl We always loved to eat the chocolate chip swirl When I was younger you would give me twirl
4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 11/05/2009
...can see is to watch out for "ing" verbs and try to replace them with "ed" when possible...really will boost your word count. Think of " and " as something used for summary. It's just...
4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 07/09/2010