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...series of emotions(which is something I do to relinquish vexation) and it's convoluted. But there is nothing wrong with ...

Don't you mean rate my book? Hahaha just kidding it is actually really good 10/10.

...really good. I like how you make the reader feel like they are in the story, and you go deep into it, instead of staying on the surface of the story like some...

...great story going here! The characters and intriguing, and you pull the reader in by ...grade school to only use pronouns once or twice in a row, and break them up with direct nouns. It'...

Your descriptions - particularly where the sun and outdoors are concerned - are really well......" Try reading that out loud and you'll see it doesn't sound quite right. "The...

I liked it, especially the first sentence. but take away the comma, and put in a period. I like the idea :) You should read the Succubus series by Richelle Mead. I think you'll enjoy that!

That can't be the flat out start to the first chapter! Make that the intro, then run head on into chapter 1 with a new story, with possibly different characters, something to change it up! It's obvious that this is a semi-mystery, so change the characters so that they're all...

Is this a story or a report of a fashion show? All you re doing is describing what each looked like. Most readers won t care. At least, I don t. There is no character development, no plot, no conflict, no mystery...