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  1. ... the light. She leapt forwards. The deep blue-green waves below were awaiting her arrival with anticipation. They, at...

    5 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 14/03/2011

  2. ... shivers along her arms ~ she'd walked in deeper , the salty waves lapping at her and sending ...down...arms Fear...

    3 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 03/05/2013

  3. I really like it for what it is, but if I knew what she was actually thinking, or why this stuff was happening, the emotional slam on the reader would be multiplied 5x. Excellent for random creative writing! just add more...

    5 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 07/01/2012

  4. ... to get wiped on the very first wave . I loved the people from Rohan... in the end, those stuck at Helm's Deep were saved by their very own, not the...

    4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 29/06/2010

  5. I love the descriptive words you use, especially the way you described trees in the second paragraph. However, I think at points you overdo it- as in, it gets a bit wordy. Like this part: "Before any attempt to slow the fast...

    3 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 27/09/2013

  6. ... waves 2)Illusions of the ocean 3)Sleep to the sound of the ocean 4) Deep sleep illusions 5)Sleeping under the waves (instead of sleeping under the stars) 6) Waves of listening...

    7 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 02/07/2011

  7. The deep blue sea was a reflection of dark ominous clouds. The waves grew and grew as the sea roughened. A small boat—a...

    8 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 11/02/2012

  8. ...they Do not go gentle into that good night. Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright Their frail deeds might have danced...

    3 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 05/10/2008

  9. Yes, very good. Your description is evocative without crowding the reader out; your dialogue sounds realistic, and there's a lovely sense of building emotion. I think you might do better to find another way to put the flashbacks in...

    5 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 11/04/2010

  10. Wow, I was expecting another failed attempt at writing like the rest of these people. I was surprised to actually read something good =) It was really nice, and for a 16 year old you have talent in writing. Continue...

    7 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 14/09/2009

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