I wouldn't add any punctuation, the line breaks serve well enough for established ryhthm, in fact I would take out the punctuation you have "the sewers embracing her spirit" If you do want a more distinct break in that line you could leave a space...
10 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 15/12/2013
wow is pretty much all i can say, you must be creative and imaginative. at first i was confused but i read it over and over and then all of those details just filled my head, you have great potential to be a successful poet, maybe one day. I hope you continue posting...
8 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 26/04/2009
I don't know how I missed this when it was first posted (several days ago now). Of course I remember you and would suggest that your coat rests firmly on the peg. I'll not be handing it to you. Nice write here as...
16 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 18/01/2010
A couple share a life in Canada. It is all they have known and the female is happy with their isolated country prairie environment though the male dreams of a more urban and affluent existence. They stay together ATM as it is...
7 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 26/06/2012
OK,,,,I like Oasis Dreams, the title totally caught my attention,, up until the end when it begins to sound a little like a threat,,,, "for this crime you'll be indicted",,I thought it was a love unrequited poem. I would...
8 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 06/08/2009
sometimes.... .....we reach far to find beauty.... it's so close, we refuse to see standing against it, stretching past not believing the reason it is so close ...pain is not the answer to feeling alive we have a better choice.
14 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 10/11/2011
I love the last two lines. So redemptive and clear, at the end of a tumultuous mind-swim that feels like it's going to drown poet and reader alike.
8 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 05/10/2010
One more photo of the sun shining through that dress & we dance. OK? Do your twirl, you look lovely.
7 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 23/09/2009