...in the story. (Here comes a simile.) A story is like a mattress . Too much fluff and it's squishy and unsupported. Too little fluff and...
5 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 05/09/2008
...black bird soared past my window, contrasting against the orange and purple sky". Instead of saying "contrasting against"...
3 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 14/05/2010
... incorrectly. Such as: "Mounting myself off the mattress I ambled to my dressing table..." '...
2 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 26/07/2009
...on the forest floor unhidden, covered in brown dying leafs and purple bruises marring his face and a writhing pain. <...
6 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 24/06/2011
...on the forest floor unhidden, covered in brown dying leafs and purple bruises marring his face and a writhing pain. <...
4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 21/06/2011
Hello, So I like this a lot actually. There are a few things that I don't. There is a little *too* much description that bogs down near your opening. You have an eye for detail, but I'm...
9 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 22/08/2010
...have a name? Right now it's teetering on purple , so you might want to bring it down a notch. The flow...apprehension. He slunk backwards across the mattress ...' Then what's he peeking out at...
4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 23/08/2010
... was delighted by the feeling of the soft purple carpet covering the area around my bed. Flopping down on the comfortable mattress , I wondered if I had ever been so...
2 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 16/07/2012
...obviously lived in look to it and I have a comfy mattress , fluffy blankets and nice mahogany furniture, it ... ;D) that tasted like a nectar, purple koolaid and rum snow cone. Just something I like...
18 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 19/01/2011
... let my frail body fall dramatically down onto my bed. The mattress was hardly affected by my weight... I should really eat more...
4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 26/02/2014
