I truly love this. I tend to be critical of all writing, but this was so compelling. It is a tad difficult to explain a bloody sequence so beautifully, but you managed that near flawlessly. Also, on a rather strange note, great names! I detest it...
3 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 06/11/2008
i thought it sounded really good. i was really interested in what was happeneing but the end went a bit strange. i think you should get rid of the 'lots and lots of blood'. it sounded silly lol. and i dont think they would 'bolt upright' if they...
5 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 30/10/2008
That was very good! Keep writing! I also hope to see it out there someday...it'd be awesome if one day I'm reading a book and suddenly realize "Heyy, I've seen this before!" Good luck! ~a fellow aspiring writer/author
10 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 30/10/2008