Initially, I feel that the rhymes hold you back, as it feels that in order to makes those rhymes works, something else was sacrificed, so the poem does not flow as well as it can. Also, the use of certain words (cacaphony...
2 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 10/06/2014
... to he said. I like the rhyming scheme too. Good jib and keel it up :) And thanks for answering mine btw!
5 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 10/09/2013
Sounds like another story of childhood. Used to enjoy those days where we would play in the tub & play games similar to what u described. Nice job. have a good weekend hugs.
4 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 24/08/2013
...it is , don't = do not , doesn't = does not , and so on ) , but jibs like a frightened horse at unfamiliar ones . our Local...
13 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 15/08/2012
Listen, you are gonna have to figure it out on your own and learn how to lead us. That reminds me, we have that HD meeting at 8pm. You bringing pastries? Edit: Well, HD, we have to discuss...
9 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 26/05/2012
Whew! I am exhausted from reading that. It's quite a challenge, almost a tongue twister. It's poetry that really makes the reader have to pay attention. Very descriptive, very visual. I really felt like I was at the mercy...
2 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 03/03/2012
Very nice, I was actually hearing the sea as I read this...
1 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 02/03/2012
tonight Corto and Bates sleep with the fishes. well done
1 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 01/03/2012