You've got a start there. Keep writing.
2 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 14/05/2014
I felt your story was very good. It was very descriptive of the surroundings and emotions. But at the end it just ended.....did you ran out of space to write? Overall your story was very good...
1 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 06/07/2010
... would re write it in third person and let the reader see some of Chris's inner dialogue.
2 Answers · Arts & Humanities · 07/07/2010